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剑桥雅思7 test 3大作文考官范文解析 工作满意度 该题目可以看作是雅思写作大作文报告类题目的变种。第一个 […]

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剑桥雅思7 test 3大作文考官范文解析 工作满意度

该题目可以看作是雅思写作大作文报告类题目的变种。第一个问题询问原因,第二个问题没有要求大家提供解决方案,而是评价所有员工都对工作满意是否现实。一般来说,这种题目的分段都比较好确定。开头一段,原因一段或者两段(视大家的论点数量而定),评价一段,最后结尾一段即可。

该题目的难度主要在第二问,即如何评估是否现实的问题。下面让我们看看考官是如何解决这一比较抽象的难题的。

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剑桥雅思7 test 3大作文题目

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well being.

What factors contribute to job satisfaction?

How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

剑桥雅思7 test 3大作文考官范文

Nowadays many adults have full-time jobs and the proportion of their lives spent doing such jobs is very high. So feelings about one’s job must reflect how an individual feels about his or her life as a whole, and because of this, job satisfaction is indeed very important for the wellbeing of that person.

Employees get job satisfaction in a number of ways. Firstly, a person needs to feel that they are doing valued and valuable work, so positive feedback from superiors is very important in this respect. A sense of fulfillment is also encouraged if a worker feels the job is worth doing because it contributes to the society or the economy as a whole. Secondly, when someone feels they are improving or developing their skills through training opportunities, for example, then there is a sense of progression and purpose that rewards a worker. The sense of belonging to a team or a working community also contributes to job satisfaction because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives. Satisfaction is also increased by a sense of responsibility for and loyalty to a team.

Of course not everyone enjoys their work. Hard economic realities mean that many people have little choice in the kind of job they can get. In some cases, an employee is working in a job that suits neither their skills nor their personality. Some jobs are repetitive and boring, and labour relations may be poor and lead to resentment and insecurity rather than to job satisfaction.

However, even though it is unlikely that all workers do feel happy in their work, I think it is not unrealistic to promote more job satisfaction in any job. If the factors identified above are implemented, then any job can be improved and more workers can feel greater degrees of job satisfaction.

剑桥雅思7 test 3考官范文解析

Task Response

1. 文章全面回答了题目中的问题。第一段改写题目,增加了工作满意度为什么对个人十分重要的原因。第二段回答影响工作满意度的因素,列举了受重视、进步、归属感、责任感等四个原因。第三段说明每个人都满意不太现实。第四段表明自己的观点:虽然不可能每个人都对工作感到满意,但促进满意度还是可行的。

2. 文章对各个论点进行了论证。不过第二自然段的论证是否充分存疑。从目前雅思写作的评分标准与改卷习惯来看,考官是不喜欢这种平行列举原因的论证方式的。还不如针对文章来自老烤鸭雅思其中的两个因素在扩展充分一些。但第三自然段的论证就很好,详细说明了为什么每个人对工作满意不现实。

Coherence and Cohesion

1. 文章分段比较合理。基本跟我们开头所说的结构一致。但最后一段除了对全文进行总结之外,还提出了自己的观点。

2. 这篇文章使用了大量的连接词来串联不同的句子。如开头段的so, because of。第二自然段的firstly, secondly, also*3,第三自然段开头的of course, 第四自然段开头的however等。

Lexical Resource

文章用词十分灵活,涉及范围也很广。具体内容可以参考下面“高分词汇短语”板块。

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

1. 作为雅思官方给出的范文,这篇文章肯定不存在任何语法错误。

2. 这篇文章除了开头段之外,使用了各种各样的从句,其中又以原因状语从句居多。不过说实话,这篇文章在语法多样性方面,完全无法跟我们之间分析过的雅思写作考官范文相比。

剑桥雅思7 test 3高分词汇短语总结

reflect v. 反映。

indeed adv. 确实。

superior n. 上级。

a sense of fulfillment 满足感。

progression n. 进步。

hard economic reality n. 艰难的经济现实

suit v. 适合。

resentment n. 愤恨,怨恨。

implement v. 实施。

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